eckhart
what a disturbing song! :) i hear you have some ideas, try blending them together in a better way. i think there's too much of that gliding synth, too less real bass, beats are really too much on the background... listen closely to some dubstep tunes and try creating that particular vibe, experiment a bit on composition (which notes go together, which dont...). i hope i gave you some useful tips! cheers