hawdy zARK, nice to see ur walkin' the lounge-path too ;-) I think this isa nice beginner, but it does need some work (in my opinion offcourse). I'll tell you what i would change, then you can still see what my opinion is worth :) It try to put the rythm more in the foreground. The rhodes is much to overwhelming - what we do want is the rhodes to be the main theme of the track. so u will have to find the right balance there. What i wouldn't do is bring to much variation into the rythm (with rims) (KISS - keep it simple stupit)(not that ur stupid - that is just the accronym ;-)) the first piano melody that comes poppin is nice - try to build on that - the second piano line is not really it in my eyes. What i would do is put more strings into it. (perhaps lose the choirs? or make them not this overruling from time to time (but that is because i don't like the sound of this choir ;-)) Then you could use a female voice - just speaking of whispering- preferably in french; but since you speak frech- you can ask someone right ;-) otherwise just take it out of some unknowk movie or tvshow :-) What i would also try - don't know if it is goiing to sound good- is try a real, accoustic sounding piano smp, try to bring some life into the track. I think this is a real slow, and a bit of a depressed track- the piano could lighten this up (if that is what u want offcourse ;-)) This brings us tho additional sounds - i think you could try some 'st germain' fx on this one. U probabely have tourist; listen to it, and you'll hear what i mean ;-) The you could, but once again not a must - use a bassline- But here don't use a too complex one; in my opinion the easiest sounding basslines othen are the best. So keep it easy and slow AND use accoustic SMP not synth emulated sounds ;-) oiyyy, i'm really letting mlyself go here, arn't i ;-). Well anyway - nice to see that i'm not the only one here experimenting on the downbeat section :). Hope i didn't give too much comment (well it is not reallt comment, its more this that I would do/try) Hope to hear the remake soon ;-) Pees en respect ;-) PS; ignore typo's and other errors - i'm not goiing to read this again :)