ZARk
Okay, let's give you some help on this one :) First of all, intro is way too long, either there is no intro or it just goes until 4th minute where you first your first break ... Your beats are way to static, they sound more like an electro beat than a drum'n'bass beat... You have no real breaks in the track, the beat just goes on in a very repetitive way. In general this is more electro than dnb (which isn't necessarily a bad thing) Try not to do your beats with a 16step sequencer, or then use it at double the speed :) or if u can put a delay on the notes, use that :)